writing in balance

When I was young, I was really into the mystery novels of Ellery Queen. There was one book in particular that always stuck in my mind. In it, a famous novelist was murdered, and the detectives discovered a locked room in her house, adjoining the room where she wrote. Another woman had lived in that room, in secret, apparently as a prisoner, and she had actually written the books which had made the novelist rich and famous.

This setup stayed in my mind for years (decades, really), but I didn’t know the title of the book. I didn’t remember anything else about it, and I wasn’t even 100% sure that it had been written by Ellery Queen. In the pre-web days, it was a lot harder to find out the answers to these sort of questions, and in any case Ellery Queen books are not much talked about these days (and there are a lot of them – quite a few of the later ones ghostwritten – and most of them are usually out of print).

But then I found it, I think from a summary on Amazon. It’s called The Door Between. I immediately bought it and read it, of course, and I quickly realized two things.

One was that I had remembered those few details accurately. The other was that it was badly written.

The early Queen novels were pretty classicly cerebral, but this one appears to reflect a desire to be more muscular. All the male characters seem to yell all the time, and mostly they seem to be about to punch each other. There’s a hard-boiled detective character who’s a pileup of cliches. He’s apparently there as a foil and contrast to Ellery Queen, who’s so unmuscular that he’s still wearing his pince-nez glasses (they would be done away with soon after).

There are some cringe-worthy Asian stereotypes, too (both Japanese and Chinese). And I don’t accept the argument that this is just a reflection of the times (the book was written in 1936), since the Philo Vance books – which were earlier and which were a big influence on the Queen books – are almost completely free of this sort of thing. In fact, Vance often earns the scorn of the official police by treating people of other races, including servants, the same way he treats white people.

The main character in The Door Between, a teenage girl, spends most of the early pages being unaccountably grumpy (after an early life which is reported as being entirely sunny). Then she realizes that she Needs To Be Marrried. She pursues and catches a fiance (this whole part of the book is pretty painful), and then she spends the rest of the book being accused of murder, repeatedly. She reacts to each accusation by weeping, usually clutching the lapels of some man’s jacket, and feebly protesting her innocence. All the man around her seem to fall in love with her, for no apparent reason, even to the point of fiddling with the evidence to keep her from being accused again. Which never works, of course.

But, that being said, the story is great. The cental premise (the prisoner who actually writes the books) is powerful and plausible. The solutions are clever and well set up (it was a standard trope in Queen books that there would be a series of solutions revealed, each one completely airtight but each one then exploded by new evidence being discovered). And the book ends as some of the Queen books from this period did, with a public reveal of the “solution,” and then a scene where Ellery confronts the actual murderer with the final explanation, which will never be made public.

This was the great theme in the middle-period Queen books, that revealing the truth behind a murder can often cause more harm than good. Quite a few of the books in these years explored different aspects of this idea. I haven’t really used this yet in the Jan Sleet mystery stories, but I’m sure I will. I’m quite influenced by Ellery Queen, as I’ve talked about here and here and here.

But there’s a reason I’m writing about this here, which is that, as I re-read The Door Between now, I wonder how’d react if I was reading it for the first time now. I’m a lot more discriminating than I was when I was a kid, after all. Would I stick it out, getting past the bad writing, to find how how good the story was? Maybe not.

I was thinking about that when reading an indie novel recently. Within a few paragraphs, two words were used incorrectly, one sentence was very badly constructed, and one word was misspelled. I was tempted to chuck it. No matter how good your story is, if people get turned off by your words and your sentences, they may not finish your book, and in any case they’re much less likely to buy your next one.

As we’ve talked about before, here and elswhere, indie books don’t get the benefit of the doubt. So, my point is that indie writers need to be sure everything is correct, particularly things which really only require a dictionary.

“Ellery Queen” was actually two men. One did the plots and the other wrote the words. With The Door Between, one was firing on all cylinders and one wasn’t. For those of us who do both (which is most writers, of course), we need to be sure our words live up to our ideas (and vice versa – I’ve read blogs for example where every word is used perfectly and every sentence is a thing of beauty, but the writer has absolutely nothing to say).

Anyway, there’s my point. The Door Between has given me a lot of pleasure, but only because I read it for the first time when I was very young. Otherwise, I would have missed out on all it had to offer me.

three news items

1) If you haven't been there yet, please check out the new website for A Sane Woman: u-town.com/jansleet.

2) I had procrastinated about taking down the earlier version of this blog, but I went there the other day and found out that somebody had hacked in and inserted a bunch of ads for fancy handbags. So, I finally took it down.

So, today's lesson is: if you have a website or a blog, take a look at it from time to time. You can't tell what kind of problems might have been developing in your absence.

3) As I mentioned here, I bought and read The Egyptian Cross Mystery by Ellery Queen, mostly because I unintentionally took an idea from it. I found that it was undoubtedly the inspiration for one aspect of "The Church Mystery," but it's not actually that good (meaning the book, not the idea). Clever, but not convincing. This is not surprising, since the really good EQ novels came later.

There was also a clue which was similar to the clue of the medicine cabinets in "The Hospital Mystery," but I don't think that was a direct inspiration. It's more that the hospital case was inspired by The Dutch Shoe Mystery, another early Ellery Queen book, and the solution is very typical of EQ, in that it's categorical rather than individual.

For example, it was typical of Agatha Christie to put a group of suspects together in a fairly restricted area, and then solve the mystery person-by-person, based on their individual attributes. Quite often, Queen would start with a much larger pool of suspects (a whole city, potentially), and then analyze the murderer's attributes in terms of categories (male or female, employee or guest, aware of a certain fact or not, etc.) until only one person was possible.

I have been wondering why Ellery Queen and Rex Stout (who wrote the Nero Wolfe mysteries) are such a particularly big influence on this project. I just figured out one reason this week, which is that their books are not particularly tied to their eras. Queen wrote from the 1930s through the 1960s, Stout from the 1940s (possibly the very late 1930s) through the 1970s, but you can read any of the books and forget whether it's early or late in the series. For example, The Egyptian Cross Mystery features a group of sun-worshiping cultists who follow a leader who thinks he's the emissary of Egyptian gods, and they all spend most of their time naked. I was surprised when one of the characters (not naked) traveled to a crime scene on the running board of a car, since it reminded me that this book was written in the 1930s, not the 1960s.

You can never read about Sherlock Holmes or Philo Vance and forget when the stories are set. Each series is rooted in a very particular time and place.

I should mention that Jan Sleet quotes Holmes from time to time ("Come, Marshall, the game's afoot!" "the curious incident of the dog in the nighttime," "a man like you, with your experience of women which extends over many nations and three separate continents"), but this is her doing the quoting, not me. She is, as she makes clear, very consciously inspired by Holmes.

my brain surprises even me

I have been keeping a mental list of the influences on the different mystery stories I've written. Some of them I've even spoken about here (I've just checked and there are too many instances to link – you could search for "Ellery Queen," "Nero Wolfe," "Sherlock Holmes," and "Philo Vance").

But here's one I wasn't aware of. I know I read The Egyptian Cross Mystery by Ellery Queen at some point. I've read all of the real Queen novels (and some of the others, the ones that were actually ghostwritten or otherwise outsourced), though for some reason I don't own a copy of this one.

But I recently read something about it online, and now it's obvious where I got a key plot element in "The Church Murder Case" (I'm not providing any links – you'll have to get your own spoilers if you want them).

But now I've ordered a copy, since I'm eager to find out if I borrowed any other elements as well. I do know that the motivation in "The Church Murder Case" is one that Queen used at least once, but I have no idea if it was used in this particular book.

Damn, this is like finding a whole new EQ book that I never read before.

what you know

I recently bought a book called A Tragedy of Errors. It's a tribute to the 75th anniversary of the first Ellery Queen novel (The Roman Hat Mystery), and (in addition to several previously uncollected short stories and the outline for the last EQ novel, which was never finished) it contains some articles and essays about Fredrick Dannay and Manfred Lee, the two men who comprised "Ellery Queen." Quite a few of the pieces, by the way, point out that The Roman Hat Mystery wasn't really very good, but that's fine because many of the later novels are very good indeed.

The particular thing which I want to mention here is that, while he was the editor of the Ellery Queen Mystery Magazine, Fredrick Dannay laid out four rules for writers.

  1. Read everything you can lay your hands on.
  2. Write what you know.
  3. Edit ruthlessly.
  4. Don't bother with writing courses. You learn to write by writing.

I've been thinking particularly about "write what you know" (I think Rule #1 speaks for itself).

To me, it's all in how you interpret and apply it. For example, I don't know anybody like starling, at least not on the surface. I don't know any place like U-town. But if you take it that way, "write what you know" turns into a rule saying, "don't have an imagination."

But I have known a lot of people very much like the people I write about. Also, nowhere in "write what you know" does it say you shouldn't learn things in the process. Write what you know, and learn the things you need to know to write the things you want to write. I tend to avoid doing research whenever I can, but if (for example) my characters ever get to Bellona (which is a good possibility), I will have to do some research, since, unlike U-town and the Quarter and Ross and Perry's house, I won't be able to base it on places I've actually been.

I agree with editing ruthlessly, too. In another part of The Tragedy of Errors, one of the Queens (so to speak) suggests that when you finish the first draft of anything, you should go through and cross out all the adjectives and adverbs. Then go back and restore only the ones you really need. I would add to that all the exclamation points, and all the places where you say someone hollered or yelled or cried or whispered or shouted, instead of simply saying that he or she "said." And, as Hemingway showed us, even a lot of the "saids" can be eliminated, as long as it's clear who's speaking.

And you do learn writing by writing. Writing is something that can be learned, and you learn through doing it. If you wanted to learn how to play guitar, would you leave the guitar alone until you felt inspired? That wouldn't get you very far. You'd learn more by practicing every day, "inspired" or not. Writing is no different. If I have any technique today, it's partly because I started by writing pretty much every day for about ten years (on a typewriter, and longhand). What I was writing was junk, but what I was learning was how to write better.

Computers make it easier to write in some ways, but more difficult in others, since computers connected to the internet provide so many distractions. I think the best writing tool you can have is a computer which is not connected to the internet (though I'm also fond of a very good fountain pen – the one I'm using now is from Lamy, a German company).

Also, computers make it easier to edit, so that you can fiddle endlessly with the same story (or scene or paragraph or sentence) and never get to the next one. Which was why I decided that A Sane Woman and U-town were "done" as of my 50th birthday. Fifteen years is enough time to fiddle with anything. Time to move on, and in moving on, apply the things I learned from writing those two books.

Speaking of which, I also apply "write what you know" in another way, which I referred to in my last entry when I said that I've known for years that Vicki and SarahBeth would end up where they are now, though I wasn't always clear on how they would get there.

For another example, quite a bit of the "A Visit to Perry" chapter was written well over ten years ago, when I was first writing A Sane Woman. It was originally going to be the climax of that book (which does end at Perry's house, but rather differently). The chapter didn't fit in that book, but the fact that I wrote it helped quite a bit with what I'm writing now. And even if you never use a particular chapter or scene, it's a way to practice, and it provides insight into the characters (and of course it can be used later as a "Deleted Scene" blog entry).

(Actually, I just checked my facts, and it was Manfred Lee, the non-editing half of Ellery Queen, who listed the four rules mentioned above, and for his son. Oh, well.)